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I had to write a poem for a contest (for school). I would've used a better one but it was too long. (I had to either write in free verse, blank verse, or something else I can't remember).
Here it is:
Lone Wanderer
Alone in the wilderness,
Alone in the Arctic cold,
Alone in the howling wind
In this bleak, white desolate land
There is no remorse.
Howling alone—
A wolf without a pack
The lone white wolf,
Just sitting there,
Alone
Why is it there?
Sitting alone
What has it done
To deserve this
This horrible fate
To be abandoned in this icy land
In this icy land
Stalks
A lone wanderer
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oo i can't explain why but i really like the first half of the poem. there is a cool rhythm to it.
Alone in the wilderness,
Alone in the Arctic cold,
Alone in the howling wind
In this bleak, white desolate land
There is no remorse.
Howling alone—
A wolf without a pack
The lone white wolf,
Just sitting there,
Alone
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Very good, although you did over use the words "alone" and "lone" a bit. If you intend to use words like that constantly, it would work to your benefit to space them farther apart. Just a suggestion though. I'd like to read some more of your poems, if you feel like posting them.
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Yeah, I did it in school (without a thesaurus to get other words). So I just used it to emphasize.
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Dang it! I had a really dark poem about a guy who commits suicide. It had different points of view from him->friends->family->world. I can't find it! I'll have to rewrite it i guess 
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Be sure to check out the forum part of the Group too. I have a few of my better poems posted up there too.
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I like the first half 0_o the lone repetitions give a nice rhythm/feeling to it
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nice poem....also...no comment about the comment you put on my blog! haha
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